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I'm lying again.

my hips are burning and I
shouldn't have but boy,
did I and it felt so BAD.
everything is good, though, for the
knobby-kneed soccer mom girls who
won't love, because they commit instead.

It's not so awful after all, living in
the land of smiles and
little kids without broken boys
on chandeliers and lovely girls with
hate in their fingers

(I will tear you apart and
grind your bones against
mine but it's just another
nothing because that's
how it will always be with
you and we won't see
each other again)

I will lie awake and intertwine your pinky with
mine because that's all
that I can bear to touch anymore


they haven't loved and
listened to beautiful liars
tell them that they're
flawless yet or heard
those noises in the night
of those who own it.

you have a lot to learn and a lot to lose
and you're going to hate but you won't LISTEN



The night beat you to covering your body in black,

and once again you're terrible at ending things.
don't waste your time on me


you're already the voice inside my head.
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rideWARRIOR Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2009
Ugh .
Everyone else's comments are all awesome and smart-sounding , and all i can say is
SHIT HELL FECK , THAT'S GOD'S GIFT TO MEEE ."
I feel so eloquent <;
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:iconhauntingmewithsmiles:
Awh, it's okay, I have the same problem too xD
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rideWARRIOR Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2009
you so don't !
you're the one that wrote this fine piece of ass-i-mean-poetry .<:
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Aconitum-Napellus Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2008  Professional Writer
I will tear you apart and
grind your bones against
mine - I love that image - it speaks so eloquently of such deep emotion
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hauntingmewithsmiles Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2008
Why, thank you!
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ScribbledNotes Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008
It's not so awful after all, living in
the land of smiles and...


should it be that comma there that I inserted? reads better to me.

personal is the best kind of poetry. keep writing, love sick child, while i ponder why the heck you only got one fav. :/
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:iconhauntingmewithsmiles:
Haha. I was a speck confused on that too, but no worries. c:
I don't know about the comma. Hmm. We'll see.
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ScribbledNotes Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008
Read it aloud! I implore you! now how often do I do that??!?!?
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:iconhauntingmewithsmiles:
did it! Did it!

Now explain to me why the ones with more faves have fewer comments and the ones with more comments have fewer faves.
>.<
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